Could you please add to this journal, these are things I would like added.
1) In the literature review add two journals that are about how boys learn differently etc
2) Add to the problem. In this area could you add more detail as to what the problem is in Australia about boys being more disengaged with literacy than girls etc..
3) Please just go over and make the writing more persuasive on that mindfulness could improvement boys engagement of literacy learning
4) Please ensure all references are in Harvard
4) Then please just tidy up the editing